Peer Review 3

Peer Review- 150 Word Note Writing Prompt 3

Overall, I think that your essay was very strong, and your body paragraphs were clearly addressed by your detailed claim sentences that related back to your overall thesis. One of the things that I thought you should work on improving is fixing is the second body paragraph which related Luke Bryan’s song with Beck’s article. Although the purpose of the paragraph was good, the relationship between the sources could be strengthened. Also, after fixing this, it could help relate back to the thesis which would improve your paper. Something else that you could fix to strength your essay is improving the connection with an individual’s autobiographical reason with music. Besides this, I enjoyed the different multimodal elements you added to your paper like bolding and italicizing sentences, adding hyperlinks and different images to help the reader interpret your essay in the way that you intended. Overall, your ideas in the rest of your paragraphs maintained a good connection to your thesis and by fixing the issue that I mentioned would help improve your essay.